Monday, December 3, 2018

Last kiss

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  1. Teymour 4dDecember 6, 2018 at 4:18 AM

    reall good
    get to the topic earlier

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  2. AnonymousDecember 6, 2018 at 4:20 AM

    You had a lot of sound changes and side talk. Your intro was really long you should get to the point. Great discription.

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  3. SabrinaDecember 6, 2018 at 4:20 AM

    This was great! You were speaking loud, and you added things to prove what you were saying. You could try getting to the point sooner!

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  4. AnonymousDecember 6, 2018 at 4:21 AM

    maybe next time you can make your intro shorter because it took a long time to get to the topic

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  5. AnonymousDecember 6, 2018 at 4:21 AM

    funy!!!!!!!!!!!

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  6. AnonymousDecember 6, 2018 at 4:21 AM

    I also liked it because your voice was loud and clear I think you did a pretty good job

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  7. Sharif 4MDecember 6, 2018 at 4:22 AM

    I like how you made sound affects and voices

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  8. Teymour 4dDecember 6, 2018 at 4:24 AM

    very funny nice sound effects

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  9. Livio 4MDecember 6, 2018 at 4:25 AM

    you should give the claim and reasons earlier in the paper

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  10. Bella 4DDecember 6, 2018 at 4:26 AM

    I like your enthusiasm, but try not to be too crazy

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  11. AnonymousDecember 6, 2018 at 4:28 AM

    I like how you made a hook at the beginning and how you added sound affects, but I think you should have stated your claim and reasons earlier.

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  12. Mostafa 4DDecember 6, 2018 at 4:30 AM

    i like your enthusiasm but try to not get carried away

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  13. yusuf 4FDecember 6, 2018 at 4:47 AM

    your's is the best aby

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  14. AnonymousDecember 6, 2018 at 4:49 AM

    The intro was good and you stuck to your reason, but don't be that funny

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  15. AnonymousDecember 6, 2018 at 4:49 AM

    I like the voices and sound affects but i think you went a little to far...

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  16. Youssef 4fDecember 6, 2018 at 4:51 AM

    I like how you used a lot of reasons but you should try not to be as funny

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  17. khadija 4dDecember 6, 2018 at 4:51 AM

    you made me laugh but like your writing

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  18. AnonymousDecember 6, 2018 at 4:52 AM

    I LOVE YOUR HUMOUR in your writing

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  19. AnonymousDecember 6, 2018 at 4:53 AM

    yours is really good but next time be less funny

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  20. AdamDecember 6, 2018 at 4:54 AM

    Your reasons were very good and strong

    Good Job!😍😍😀😀

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  21. Habiba 4DDecember 6, 2018 at 4:54 AM

    WOW! Great intro!

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  22. mohamed 4mDecember 6, 2018 at 4:55 AM

    name the topic and try not to Be funny!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  23. Nadine 4mDecember 6, 2018 at 4:55 AM

    i love your intro

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  24. Layla December 6, 2018 at 4:55 AM

    #FUNNY

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  25. Feranmi 5KDecember 6, 2018 at 4:57 AM

    Why did you say "I am Fresh" and "I am handsome"?

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  26. AnonymousDecember 6, 2018 at 4:58 AM

    I like how you put a little bit of humor in the begining but i think you got to carried away. Also you kind of took to long getting to the point.

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  27. Sharif 4MDecember 6, 2018 at 4:59 AM

    this is my favorite😆super funny👌

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  28. Zain 4MDecember 6, 2018 at 5:01 AM

    It sounds like you are improvising because your conclusion started in when you were 2 mins into your essay and in total your essay is 7 mins

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  29. yusuf 4FDecember 6, 2018 at 5:01 AM

    that's 10/10 just try not to be very funny. Ok

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  30. ryuseiDecember 6, 2018 at 5:02 AM

    I like how you are funny! next time you should start reading your essay more earlier.
    7MINUTES!? I think it's too long! I can't finish listening it. I think you should make it more shorter. and also why did you started reading the conclusion after reading your intro?

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  31. AnonymousDecember 6, 2018 at 5:05 AM

    you repeat a lot

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